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Yearning…

>> Tuesday, July 29, 2008



The passers-by went about their day,
Unaware that my world had just blown away,
I so wanted them all to pause and say
It is just a bad dream, the storm will pass by

Streaming sunlight filtered past my blinds,
Sometimes I wonder why it is welcomed by all mankind,
The sun rays sometimes crack my smiling mask,
Revealing, that to smile is such a daunting task.

The darkness spreads slowly across the skies,
Beneath the crimsons and the black, slowly I unravel my mask.
The silent tears can now roll down free,
In the dark, no one can bother me.

I slowly moved across to the window pane,
The drawn curtains reveal the pattering rain,
The raindrops wash my tear stained face,
But my heart still yearns and the gnawing pain remains….




Note: My attempt at something remotely poetic, written around 3 years back... Just found it in my archives and posted it . Please bear with the rhyme!!

21 comments:

mayz July 29, 2008 at 12:50 PM  

wats d pain v r hidin behind d mask deepti...this is a new side to u...or is it a side that u never revealed??

d pain is quite evident...n beautifully put...

**The sun rays sometimes crack my smiling mask,
Revealing, that to smile is such a daunting task.

totally love this line...says so much...n yet dsnt say everythin!!!

Karthik July 29, 2008 at 4:00 PM  

Wow..well written. really..

Why suddenly a sad verse rather than humorous prose?

Deepti July 29, 2008 at 9:32 PM  

@Mayz: Glad you liked it .. I had written this when I was at the lowest point in life and as I read it again today all the thoughts came rushing by again :(

Deepti July 29, 2008 at 9:32 PM  

@Karthik : Great to see you after a long time .. thanks . The humour will be back after this short break :D

Enduring the Babbles of Life July 30, 2008 at 7:33 PM  

interesting deepti...why is it that somehow when u r really down...poetry seems to b more natural than prose!? my 2 pice

Macadamia The Nut July 31, 2008 at 8:32 AM  

I loved it..!!
I've felt this way at times... dunno why but rain can make me either extremely stimulated or excessively depressed :D

Hi girlfriend!
*muah!!*

Solitaire July 31, 2008 at 1:12 PM  

And I thought you were writing about the bomb blasts after reading the first few lines. Duh!

Nikhil Narayanan August 1, 2008 at 10:57 PM  

Hallon!
I happened to read the note first. ;)
"Please bear with the rhyme"

Nice.
-Nikhil

Deepti August 2, 2008 at 11:11 AM  

@Durba: thanks babes...poetry flows in with grief ;)

Deepti August 2, 2008 at 11:13 AM  

@Mac:Thanks girl friend :D.. the rains get extreme emotions in me too!! Muaah!!

Deepti August 2, 2008 at 11:13 AM  

@Soli:Ohh so it was a disappointment!! hope it meets ur expectations next time :D

Deepti August 2, 2008 at 11:15 AM  

@Nikhil: We always read disclamiers first .. curiosity kills the cat!! :D thanks

Keshi August 4, 2008 at 10:34 AM  

very beautiful! Mainly because I cud relate to this feeling...


Keshi.

Deepti August 4, 2008 at 10:40 AM  

@Keshi: Talk about telepathy .. I just was reading your blog ... thanks :)

Keshi August 5, 2008 at 9:59 AM  

haha HUGS!

Keshi.

Nishanth August 5, 2008 at 8:10 PM  

Deepti...My dear sister... God I guess the poetry just runs in our blood.. Aptly written...Do write more...

ray August 6, 2008 at 4:39 PM  

Hi ,

I was reading ur blog posts and found some of them to be wow.. u write well.. Why don't you popularize it more.. ur posts on ur blog ‘Mindspace’ took my particular attention as some of them are interesting topics of mine too;

BTW I help out some ex-IIMA guys who with another batch mate run www.rambhai.com where you can post links to your most loved blog-posts. Rambhai was the chaiwala at IIMA and it is a site where users can themselves share links to blog posts etc and other can find and vote on them. The best make it to the homepage!

This way you can reach out to rambhai readers some of whom could become your ardent fans.. who knows.. :)

Cheers,

Deepti August 7, 2008 at 9:30 AM  

@Nishanth: Thanks da!!

Cinderella. August 14, 2008 at 1:27 PM  

Remotely poetic ?!

I think it was nice poetry...way nicer than what you consider as a feeble attempt !

I hope my post dint add up to this though.

:(

Deepti August 14, 2008 at 3:50 PM  

@Cindy: Thanks a lot !!! This is something i wrote long ago :) You are one of the best poets in blog world :D

Swats September 16, 2008 at 1:11 PM  

Ekdum Senti!!
Nicely written!